Popular events like football world cup and other international sporting occassions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

the given tables illustrate data about revenues of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and
bananas
in five different countries
such
as the
UK
,
Switzerland
,
Denmark
,
Belgium
, and
sweden
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Sweden
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in two separate years 1999 and2004. It is clear that the
figures
for coffee revenues in these countries increased from 1999 to 2004, while the
figures
for
bananas
decreased in
Belgium
and
Sweden
, but increased in others.
First
of all, In 1999, the
figure
for coffee sales in
Switzerland
was the highest, at 3 million
euro
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euros
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. Followed that, the
figures
for
Denmark
, the
UK
,
Belgium
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and Belgium
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were at 1.8, 1.5, and 1, respectively. The
figure
for
Sweden
stood at 0.8, the
lovest
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lowest
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one. In 2004, the
figure
for the
UK
soured to 20,
an
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and
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over
ten-folds
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ten-fold
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increase compared to in 1999. The
figure
for
Switzerland
duobled
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doubled
to 6, followed by 2,1.7, and 1 in
Denmark
,
Belguim
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Belgium
, and
Sweden
, respectively. According to the graphs, the
figure
for the
UK
bananas
revenue was 15, stood at the highest revenue in 1999.
On the other hand
, the
figures
for others were under 2. In 2004, The
figure
for the
UK
went up by 32, continued to be the highest. Significant increases were seen in the
bananas
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banana
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revenues of
Switzerland
and
Denmark
as over
five-folds
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five-fold
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increase and nearly eight-times growth, respectively. Whereas the
figures
for
Belgium
and
Sweden
decreased to 1 and 0.9, respectively.
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  • foster global unity
  • diplomatic tools
  • friendly competition
  • national pride
  • peaceful context
  • media coverage
  • international image
  • stimulate economic growth
  • exacerbate tensions
  • nationalist sentiments
  • politicization of sports
  • doping
  • corruption
  • exploitation
  • public discontent
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