Television is dangerous because it destroys the family tie and community spirit. It is said by some that television absorbs so much of people’s time that they have no time to talk to each other. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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Some people might say that watching

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can destroy the warmth between families as it takes so much

time

and eventually

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to no talk between family

members

Although

I accept that there are some negative impacts about that but I disagree about the statement.

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of all, most

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family

members

enjoy spending

time

together while watching their

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programmes

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programmes

as it is one kind of relaxation to release

stress

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they have suffered from their work or school. At that

time

, they can create stronger bonds between them by discussing and giving opinions about the script and sharing pleasure.

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, some TV shows have positive effects on families as they not only include daily activities, problems and challenges

within

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family

members

but

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family love and tie. They can transmit valuable spirit within community and society as a kind of entertaining rather than educating based on the fact that most

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people love to

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messages through enjoying

entertainments

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and programmes.

On the other hand

, some disadvantages can be seen in some people who spend too much

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watching TV and become addicted, they might tend to neglect other

members

and that kind of

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will destroy the relationship within families.

In addition

, those with television dependency can have communication and social problems in the community as they become isolated and their interpersonal skills need to be improved. In conclusion, while there are some negative effects in society due to

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such

as addiction and dependency, I accept it takes part an important role in creating

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atmosphere in society as good things

such

as getting family

time

together and conveying proper knowledge can be received through entertainment.

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Television is dangerous because it destroys the family tie and community spirit. It is said by some that television absorbs so much of people’s time that they have no time to talk to each other. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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