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Some pople say that now we can see film on over phone and tablet, there is no needto go cinema. Others think that that to be fully enjoyed, films need to seen in a cinema. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The table illustrates the reason why
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 living in the UK
traveled
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 overseas between 1994 to 1998. While the bar chart shows
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the regions
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 they chose to visit. Both the table and chart are based on a survey of 100,000
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 . Overall, holiday travel was by far the most popular reason for going abroad each year, while the total number of overseas trips increased over the period. By a large margin, the preferred travel destination was Western Europe, which increased in popularity as travel to North America and other regions remained relatively low. In 1994, 15246
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 surveyed
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 abroad on holiday, rising to 20,700 in 1998.
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, only 2,957
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 travelled for business in the same year, followed by 3,181 who visited family and friends. The total number of visits increased from 22,072 in 1994 to 28,828 in 1998.
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, the number travelling for other reasons stayed fairly constant at around 900
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. Visits to the most popular destination, Western Europe, increased significantly from just under 20,000 in 1994 to slightly below 25,000 four years later.
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, far fewer
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 travelled to other areas and North America. In 1998, the figures were approximately 2400 and 2300
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 respectively, with visits to these regions having experienced relatively little growth over the period.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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