In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people

In some
countries
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the ownership of people's
home
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is an important matter. In these
countries
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it is very important to own
home
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rather than
renting
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rent
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it. It might be indifferent
for
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some
,
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but for these people
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not
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ot
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it
matter. Why is that the case? you might wonder. I think it is because your
home
is supposed to be exactly what it sounds like, your
home
. As a
human
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I think we long after having
stuff
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to call our own, doesn'
t
matter what it is, but humans will always want to claim ownership.
This
is nothing new and it has been like
this
through
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human
history
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, like colonies
for example
, which later once again became the same country as before
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by its own inhabitants. People will always want to be the one to decide what happens to them and when you rent your
home
you can'
t
even paint it without the
owners
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permission. If you as a person are renting an apartment there might be a lot of stressors in your life. A scratched wall can cause you a major headache
,
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because the wall was not yours. The bedroom you are currently sleeping in might not be available as long as you hope, things happen in life and maybe the
next
landlord won'
t
want to have you as a tenant.
In
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other perspective
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, not owning your
home
could be a relief when it comes to your finance. As a
renter
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you won'
t
have to pay
mortgage
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the mortgage
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, take loans or spend an awful lot of money on buying the property. You wouldn'
t
have to worry about the house market crashing or a natural disaster destroying your expensive
home
. Bottom line, as a human I feel like we need to have a
home
and calling it your own can make that more special. I personally would rather own my house, because
then
whatever happens it is on me and no one else.
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