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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
 modern day of
work
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 many companies would rather have
people
 who got some experience than knowledge. There are many reasons why
people
 agree with
this
. I for one d agree with
this
 as well due to many things, and I believe that
this
 essay will discuss why the benefits outweigh the disadvantages.
Firstly
, A lot of businesses like to hire
people
 that have a background in jobs as they won’t be needing any type of training. Having
people
 who hot an idea of what a job is like will always be confident in their
work
 as they had previous jobs. Even more, they have awareness of what to do in some type of situation.
Although
, humans with knowledge of
work
 can
also
 be spectacular sometimes
but
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they will need to learn how to
work
 in a job and to communicate with customers and co-workers. In some difficult times in
work
, they won’t be able to do as well as the person with confidence in his old participation jobs due to the reason of knowing what to do.
In addition
 to that, they will need some sort of worker that will illustrate what tools are needed for the position he is in.
Furthermore
, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages as many companies will save money and time due to not needing to train or pay the employee. As well as not
required
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 to teach the employee to be confident
is
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in
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 his job as many
people
 are not. Overall, these are the reasons why I agree
to
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this
 topic and think that the well-being reasons outweigh the disadvantages in all ways possible.
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