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Band 5

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Monday and Wednesday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice Write at least 150 words

Dear
Mr.
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 Ali I am writing
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 letter to convince you to give my group a new opportunity. So let me describe my amazing group
for
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 you
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 of all, we are a group of musicians
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is
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consists of five members and we are adults, so our age
it
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is between 20 to 40 years,
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 we play Jazz, and sometimes we play
guitar
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, so we create a nice hearing. I would like to tell you some reason
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benefit
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 for our community we create a job when we go to events so that’s a huge reason for us to continue to practice,
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however
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 our music makes people cheerful and happiness like the older people say music is a cure for every disease,
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 to that we suggest to you for any available days to
reservation
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 the hall and if I can provide you with any
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 information send me an email . Best Regards Abdulaziz Alruhaimi

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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