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Many people say that comapnies should give importance to their employers whereas other say that they should give importance to customers. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #comapnies #importance #employers #customers
Both
 the
customers
 and
employees
 are an individual part of a
company
. Some individuals opine that
company
 should
gives
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give
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first
 priority to their employe, while others think that their
first
 concern
have
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has
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 to be
consumer
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a consumer
the consumer
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.
This
 essay will discuss
both
 sides. I believe that a
company
 should offer importance
both
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to both
show examples
employees
 and
customers
. Many believe that
employees
 are the main key to
maintain
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maintaining
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 a
company
 so they have to be
offer
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offered
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 more importance. A number of
happay
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happy
 skilful
employees
 can make
customers
 happy. It is impossible to become
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a desire
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desire
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desired
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 customer without the help of companies worker.
Employees
are work
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are working
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 to be a medium between
company
 and customer which may lead
to
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apply
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a
company
 to express their product and service to them resulting in
company
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the company
a company
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 will
developed
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develop
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the
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apply
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profit. In apple
company
,
for example
, their CEO always says in the media that their
first
 attention to their workers
as a result
 they are the
worlds
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world's
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 highest growing
company
.
Hence
, some people’s mind if
a
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an
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 organisation wants to grow their
buisness
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business
, they have to make happier their workers
first
.
On the other hand
, others believe that
customers
 are the livelihood of the businesses. How
much
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apply
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well a
company
depends
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does depends
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 on their relationship with their consumer. If the
customers
 will become satisfied
on
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with
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 a
company
, they will always buy products
of
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from
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this
company
 or invest
on
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in
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this
company
 which may help
company
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the company
a company
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 to grow their business.
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That's
That
Thats
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That's
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 why associations spend lots of time and energy to feel their
customers
 happy.
Fo
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For
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 instance, today when we go
any
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to any
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company
 or organisation, we see they produce us snakes
such
 as coffee, different kind of fruits or others some fast food
first
 and treat us like a guest. A good
company
 always try to convince
his
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its
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customers
 with their behaviour which may make a
conpany
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company
 good.
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Therefore
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Therefor
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, the more the better
relation
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relationship
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 a
company
 has with their customer, the higher possibility there will be to get more profit. To conclude, nowadays the topic that either a
company
 should
provides
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provide
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first
 attention to their consumer or their
worker
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work
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 is become debatable which raises strong
argument
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arguments
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 on
both
 sides. In my opinion, a
company
 should
maintains
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maintain
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 a good relationship with
both
 of them. Because for a
companies
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company's
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 prospect they
both
 are equally necessary like
employees
 are the key to
run
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running
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a
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apply
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organisations
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organisation
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 and
customers
 are the
key
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keys
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 to
developed
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developing
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 business.
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