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Many people say that companies should give importance to their employees, whereas other say that they should give importance to customers. Discuss both view and give your opinion

#people #companies #importance #employees #customers
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Both
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 the
customers
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 and
employees
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 are an individual part of a
company
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. Some individuals opine that
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company
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companies
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 should give
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first
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 priority to their employe, while others think that their
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first
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 concern has to be the consumer.
This
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both
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 sides. I believe that a
company
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 should offer importance to
both
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employees
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 and
customers
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. Many believe that
employees
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 are the main key to maintaining a
company
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 so they have to be offered more importance. A number of happy skilful
employees
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 can make
customers
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 happy. It is impossible to become
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customer
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 without the help of companies worker.
Employees
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 are working to be a medium between
company
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 and
customer
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 which may lead a
company
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 to express their product and service to them resulting in the
company
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 will develop profit. In apple
company
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,
for example
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, their CEO always says in the media that their
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first
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 attention to their workers
as a result
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 they are the world's highest growing
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.
Hence
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, some
people’s
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people
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mind
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minds
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 if an organisation wants to grow their business, they have to make happier their workers
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first
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.
On the other hand
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, others believe that
customers
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 are the livelihood of the businesses. How well a
company
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 does depends on their relationship with their consumer. If the
customers
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 will become satisfied with a
company
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, they will always buy products from
this
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company
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 or invest in
this
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company
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 which may help the
company
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 to grow their business. That's why associations spend lots of time and energy to feel their
customers
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 happy.
For instance
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, today when we go to any
company
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 or organisation, we see they produce us snakes
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 as coffee, different kind of fruits or others some fast food
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first
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 and treat us like a guest. A good
company
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 always try to convince its
customers
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 with their behaviour which may make a
company
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 good.
Therefore
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, the more the better relationship a
company
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 has with their
customer
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, the higher possibility there will be to get more profit. In my view,
both
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 employers and consumers are
same
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the same
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 necessary for a
company
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. A
company
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 can’t run without employers because
of
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apply
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employers serve the
company
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 to
customers
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.
In contrast
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,
also
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 a
company
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 can’t
substain
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sustain
 without
customer
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 cause
customer
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 are the key to
developed
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developing
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 the
buisness
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business
. To illustrate, when people go
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to a
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a
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an
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 organisation, the people who work here tell about their services on them and if they find satisfaction, they purchase the service which
grow
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company
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the company
a company
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. So, two of them
are exist
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exist
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a
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in a
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company
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. To conclude, nowadays the topic that either a
company
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 should provide
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first
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 attention to their consumer or their
worker
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work
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 is become debatable which raises strong arguments on
both
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 sides. I think, a
company
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 should maintain a good relationship with
both
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 of them.
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