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The line shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the
vehicle
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 theft that happened in
the
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Great
Britain
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, Sweden, France and
Canada
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 respectively. It is been categorised by the number of stolen
vehicles
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 in thousands with its respective years from 1990 to 1999. Overall, the highest
vehicle
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 heists were noted in Great
Britain
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 compared to the other countries throughout the years,
however
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, the lowest robberies were found in
Canada
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. A
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comparison
comparision
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comparison
 between the two countries, where the majority of
vehicles
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 are being robbed, namely Great
Britain
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 and Sweden, shows that
Britain
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 has a zig-zag trend from 1990 to 1990.
This
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 includes reaching the highest level of
vehicle
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 thefts twice to twenty thousand in 1993 and 1997, and lowest in 1994 and 1999 about sixteen thousand.
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, the
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 theft ratio in Sweden seems incremental from the very beginning till 1999 with an exceptional year, in 1991, when the robberies were controlled by approximately 1000
vehicles
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.
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,
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 France and
Canada
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 could be considered safe for
vehicles
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 because of the low crime rates compared to other countries, France had a slight incline in
vehicle
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 safety issues throughout the years.
Canada
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,
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, had a slight high stolen
vehicle
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 ratio at the beginning of 1990, but it can be seen that the situation had been improved since
then
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.
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