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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How this problem can be overcome?

#people #balance #work #parts #lives
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 reasons that
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 could like to mention below why balancing work could be difficult with other parts of lives
Firstly
, A person who is more passionate about his career and enjoys the work culture at his office space and
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performs
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 his job
duties
 on time without any stress can easily
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 balance in other parts of his
life
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human
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 who undergoes more pressure and does his job
duties
 only for his livelihood. But for every
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 it is must
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maintain a
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balanced
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balance
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life
 between job and other
life
responsibilties
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 because
for example
, One my
collegue
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colleague
karthik
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 who is very good at his career gives
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 importance to other
life
duties
 but in the long run he faced many obstacles due to the unbalanced nature
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 he even faced hardships at his office space, But eventually he had practised the 21 days Habit challenge where he
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overcomed
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overcomes
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 his challenges by prioritizing and planning his schedules properly and repeating the
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 formula daily. At
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 could like to
summerise
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 that with proper planning and
repeatation
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repetition
preparation
 humans can maintain a healthy path between work
life
 and other
duties
.
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