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Professionals like doctors, teachers and lawyers contribute equally to society with non-professionals including entertainers and sports people. Thus, they should receive equal pay. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Many people believe that professions
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 as health care, education or lawmakers should be treated equally as entertainers and sportsmen. I strongly agree with
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 statement.
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 essay will discuss my viewpoints in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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 with, professionals
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 as doctors, engineers, teachers or lawyers do more hard work to achieve their positions. They invest huge amounts of
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 and
years
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 to gain their degree.
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, engineers invest 5-6
years
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 in education to gain knowledge.
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, their fees are
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 in lacs which sometimes becomes difficult to manage
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 they take education loans to gain a degree. So, these professions should be treated equally as non-professionals.
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, nowadays, it is easy to become a star or actor. There are many platforms
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 as Instagram, tik tok in which people can become a star overnight. They do not invest
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 or
years
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 to become stars and still,
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 they earn more
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 than doctors, lawyers, teachers and engineers.
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, all sportspersons should
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 be treated equally they invest many
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 to build their body and
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 take care of their fitness.
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,n In sports, top players are earning high amount of
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 than other sportspersons in their team. They all equally do hard work and spend the same amount of time in training.
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, every profession should be treated equally. To conclude, in my opinion, I think that it is important to treat each and every profession should be paid according to their profession.
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