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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The line
graph
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 compares the
transportation
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 of
goods
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 in the United Kingdom over the period 1974 to 2002 via road,
water
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, rail, and pipeline. From the
graph
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, it can be clearly seen that road and
water
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transportation
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 carried more
goods
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 in the United Kingdom than the amount carried by pipelines and rails.
Body paragraph 1
Studying the
graph
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 in more detail, it is clear that road, being the most popular mode of
transportation
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 swelled significantly from about 70
million
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 tons in 1974 (at the start of the period) to about 100
million
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 tons in 2002, approximately 30
million
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 tons higher than in 1974,
although
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 there was a dip 1994 to about 80
million
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.
Body paragraph 2
In terms of
water
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 and railway transformation the number of
goods
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 transported in 1978 /what about 1974/, practically was the same with 40
million
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 tonnes,
then
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 gradually
water
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 transported
goods
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 increased up to 70
million
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 in 2002, while the amount of merchandise carried by trains reached 40
million
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 after a major drop in 1998 to about 20 /2 dips to 30/
million
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. It is clear from the data that the pipeline has the lowest point in the
graph
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 where it
initially
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 in 1987 (10
million
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 ) and over the years, dramatically increased over 20
million
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 tonnes in 2002.
Conclusion
Overall, according to the
graph
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, it is evident that roads have been primarily used gr as a means of transport over the said period continuing to be at the apogee not clear. The pipeline,
on the other hand
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, has remained at the nadir.
However
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, all the modes of
transportation
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 have shown an increase somewhere near 1996.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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