Some people believe that students should acquire working experience during their gap year instead of traveling. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Many students take a year gap before they start
next
Correct pronoun usage
their next
study
, and do different things in their free time like traveling
, playing games and some of them are Change the spelling
travelling
also
doing job
. People are arguing that they should Add an article
the job
a job
gain
work experience
during this
free time which helps them in their upcoming study
and after that in their professional carrier, Fix the agreement mistake
studies
instead
of just traveling
here and there. I agreed with Change the spelling
travelling
this
statement, also
travelling will be good
Add an article
a good
experience
of
Change preposition
for
Correct pronoun usage
their
they
future Correct your spelling
the
study
or career
will related
Change the verb form
relate
be related
with
it.
Change preposition
to
To begin
with, some people are suggesting to Add an article
a student
student
that Fix the agreement mistake
students
do
a Change the verb form
does
job
and gain
working Change the verb form
gains
experience
in their gap year for different reasons. First
, It will give them Add a hyphen
real-world
real world
Add a hyphen
real-world
experience
and challenges. Second
, It will help them in their further
study
with gained practical knowledge. Not only limited to that, also
save money for their college fees, furthermore
, they
create new connections with Add the word(s)
but they also
other
that will help them to search for Correct pronoun usage
others
Add an article
a job
job
after college. For Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
instant
, Add an article
an instant
One
Correct word choice
if One
student
completed Correct article usage
a bachelor
bachelor
and Change noun form
bachelor's
then
do
Correct subject-verb agreement
does
job
before his Add an article
the job
masters
, he will Change noun form
master's
gain
experience
of
Change preposition
in
the
actual live projects, which skills Correct article usage
apply
currently
in demand and Add a missing verb
are currently
gain
new friends and money, this
all will help them in Correct pronoun usage
his masters
masters
Change noun form
master's
study
and after in job
hunt.
Correct article usage
the job
In addition
, traveling
is Change the spelling
travelling
also
a kind of experience
itself and it can become helpful to many other student
in their Change to a plural noun
students
study
and life. for
example
if Add a comma
,example
Correct your spelling
someone
some one
Correct your spelling
someone
want
to pursue their Change the verb form
wants
career
in travelling
industry, or Add an article
the travelling
what
to become a shelf or historian. Travelling will give them good Correct pronoun usage
apply
experience
and opportunity to Add an article
the explorer
explorer
in their Replace the word
explore
respected
areas.
To conclude, having a work Replace the word
respective
experience
in
the gap year is a good investment of time which have Change preposition
during
help
Wrong verb form
helped
student
in their study
and career
. And, travelling also
give
them different Change the verb form
gives
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
experience
which also
helps them in their study
and career
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