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Global warming becomes a serious issue to the environment. What are the ways to prevent the environment?

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Nowadays, global warming is becoming a popular concern for all
of
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the
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organisms, and our world is not very healthy.
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, it is important and necessary to prevent and take care of our world. In preventing the
environment
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, we can practice a vast majority of ways, but growing more
trees
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, saving
water
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 and recycling plastics are three fundamental ways to prevent environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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.
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, we should consider
to plant
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 more
trees
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.
Trees
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 are
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 major contribution to
keep
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 our world healthy. It can produce oxygen,
absorb
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 carbon dioxide and
many
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 other toxic
gas
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.
Trees
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also
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 help to prevent floods and it is
also
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 a healthy place for many species. Forest
are
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 essential for
the
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 fair climate,
in
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turn
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 it is helpful to
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agriculture.
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, we should reduce, recycle and reject the use of
plastic
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 bags. As it takes a thousand years to eliminate
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plastic
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 bag, it is very harmful to our
environment
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 and sea organisms. When we fire
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plastic
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 bags, it can lead to air pollution. If we discharge them into
water
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 or soil, it will cause
water
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 pollution.
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, reducing
plastic
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bag
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 is the only way. By recycling and reusing
plastic
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 bags, we can instantly reduce the amount of
plastic
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bag
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bags
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 and it has a big impact
to
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 our healthy
environment
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.
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, we should cultivate the habit of saving resources. It includes saving
water
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, energy, and
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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. Saving
water
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 can prevent landslides. We should
also
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 consider
to use
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 more public transportation to reduce the amount of carbon dioxide in the air.
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, industries must discharge the toxins systematically for all solids, liquids or gas. By
practicing
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 the above fundamental ways, we can protect our
environment
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 and preserve the planet for our future generations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecological balance
  • Renewable resources
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Ecotourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainable development
  • Conservation efforts
  • Ecosystem services
  • Pollution prevention
  • Natural habitats
  • Wildlife protection
  • Climate resilience
  • Resource management
  • Stewardship
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