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studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they could get a good job once they are released. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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A section of
people
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the education
education
 to the folks in prison,
hence
, it will be
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utilitarian
 for them to get a
job
 later. I completely agree that it is better that prisoners receive
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education
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 once they are out of prison.
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, it is vital
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people
 in jail to receive
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better
education
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second
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life.
Therefore
,
this
 opportunity will give them a new hope to redeem their dark past in order to be more
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successful
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successful
people
, as well as to mend some
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 society
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people
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succeed
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provided
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 that they have a criminal record. For
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instance
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instance
, with proper exposure
learning
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, these kinds of
people
 may get a suitable
job
 that suit
with
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them, as some occupations still require their
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.
Secondly
, the provided
education
 will ease the
the
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prisoners to get a
job
 placement. It is
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undeniable
that is
 not easy employers to employ
people
 who have
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 record,
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nonetheless
, with all the
knowledges
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knowledge
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 that they seize from that
education
 are less likely able to open
people
 eyes to hire them as
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 employee.
Thus
,
this
 is a prominent parameter in assisting
people
 to get a
job
 that the authorities need to consider. In conclusion, it is no doubt that
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employment
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employement
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employment
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ex-convicts.
As a result
, the benefits of providing
education
 to the
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prisoners
outweight
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outweigh
 its drawbacks.
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