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The chart demonstrates how many
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guest
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 to Caribbean
Island
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 stay on
cruise
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shift
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 or on the
island
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 and the total
number
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 of tourists from 2010 to 2017. Overall, it can be seen that people who came to stay at the
cruise
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 dispatch were far higher in 2017 than in the other place to stay throughout the whole time frame. Looking at the line of
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guest
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guests
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 who choose to stay on
cruise
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 ships, between 2012 and 2015 the statistic of
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guest
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guests
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continue to jump,
at
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but at
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 the same time total
number
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 of
foreigner
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foreigners
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 who be staying on the
island
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 no increased significantly. According to the chart, in 2016 and 2017 most people choose to stay on
cruise
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 ships so the line across-line
guest
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 stayed on the
island
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. The
number
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 of totals from the whole-time frame
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 continues to increase. From 2015 – 2016 only 2.5 million visitors come to the Caribbean
Island
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, only in one year the
number
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 of visitors
jump
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 to 2017 become 3.5 million people.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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