The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There are two maps,
one
of which illustrates how the science
park
was back in 2008,
however
, the other
one
displays the upgraded plan of the science
park
.
Overall
, some easily visible upgrades are the utilisation of both grasslands by a new addition of a Research and development section, and the expansion of the current
Cyber
security
department. In 2008, there was a
car
park
at
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center
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of the map, which had connecting paths with the business units and the
Cyber
security
section.
Secondly
, the woodland area was on the southwest
side
to
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the
car
park
, which
also
had an IT
center
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nearby.
One
of the grasslands,
moreover
, was on the right
side
of the
car
park
, and another
one
was on the northwest
side
, which had
the
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offices and reception areas nearby. At present, the business units, offices, and woodland areas are untouched.
However
, the
car
park
size has been reduced
while
the
Cyber
security
section has been expanded from the north
side
by replacing the grassland without damaging the woodland area. The reception area is now replaced with the University hub
,
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and IT
Center
to
Innovation
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the Innovation
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center
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.
Additionally
, now, the roads have a cycle path along the
side
of
roads
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,
one
bus stop added at
one
inter-junction of the road, and a new railway station has been established between the Innovation
center
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and the
Cyber
security
department.
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