Some people think that girls should take husband’s name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

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From past to present, in some countries ,heritage husband's name continues to be controversial, there are two valid opinions on both sides, which will
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essay. On the one hand, it is agreed that the
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name of wives should be the same as their husbands. As a matter of fact, it is normal for some nations,
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it being a traditional process. In their eyes, the family likes being one, not separated.
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, in some ,countries it can be seen that based on regulations they need to
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, in England when people want to rent a house they should have the same family label. So, international people face problems in these nations.
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, people opposed to
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old tradition feel that they should live with their own surname, which has heritage from their ancestors.
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, they believe that the family label is
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their roots
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a result of that, they want to
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the rules.
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, In recent years in
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and 21st centuries, a large number of feminist movements happened so women want to be like men and
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their families because they are married
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cancelled by the government. Some of them believe that it is a small movement, but if it
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they can do more regarding women's rights. In conclusion, from my point of view, based on some changes in terms of human rights , it is the best time to substitute erstwhile rules. After a thorough analysis of
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subject, most women prefer to not
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their past and their surname when they
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