The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph shows the changes in the
proportion
of households owning electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in one country from 1920 to 2019. The
proportion
of families who have a refrigerator saw a sharp and dramatic growth from 0% in 1920 to 100% in 1980, standing at
this
level until 2019.
Similarly
, the
figure
for vacuum cleaner ownership rose apparently from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000 and remained at 100% for the rest of
time
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the time
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.
In contrast
, the percentage of households who had washing machines saw a different pattern. Its
figure
increased from 40% in 1920 to 70% in 1960 and
then
dropped down to 63% in 1980;
finally
, it rose again to 73% in 2019. Meantime, The number of hours of housework per week per household kept decreasing from 50% in 1920 to 11% in 2019. The
proportion
of families who have a refrigerator saw a sharp and dramatic growth from 0% in 1920 to 100% in 1980, standing at
this
level until 2019.
Similarly
, the
figure
for vacuum cleaner ownership rose apparently from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000 and remained at 100% for the rest of
time
Correct article usage
the time
show examples
.
In contrast
, the percentage of households who had washing machines saw a different pattern. Its
figure
increased from 40% in 1920 to 70% in 1960 and
then
dropped down to 63% in 1980;
finally
, it rose again to 73% in 2019. Meantime, The number of hours of To summarize, the
proportion
of the ownership of all
the
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apply
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three electrical appliances roses, with
refrigerator
Correct article usage
the refrigerator
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and vacuum cleaner
reaching
Wrong verb form
reached
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100%. The number of hours of housework kept dropping.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, in contrast, similarly".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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