Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education?Or it the responsiblity of the goverments of poorer nayions to look after their citixens themselves .

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world
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all the
countries
are not
same
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the same
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according to riches.There are many people where people live under the poverty line .They can't afford minimum basic needs to live .Again there are many
countries
which are richer so much
that
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than
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financially challenged
countries
no matter at all for them.So,I believe that richer
countries
should help poorer
countries
. Financially strong
countries
are not only rich in assets only but
also
in technology ,infrastructure ,education etc
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Without technological
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development
developments
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development
developement
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no rich
countries
can be said developed completely .If the richer
countries
share their technology with the poorer
countries
or sell it to them
in
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a cheaper rate it will be extremely effective for them.As the more usage of their technology the more profit they will have.It is not only effective for poorer
countries
but
also
richer
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for richer
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countries
too. Poor
countries
have
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not adequate wealth to invest
for
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in
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investmemt
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investment
.Because where basic needs are hardly
meet
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up by
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their
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them
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investment in establishing industries ,developing infrastructure is
luxury
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for them.In
this
way
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richer
countries
can help poorer
countries
through investment .Poorer
countries
may not have money but they may have natural resources and cheaper human resources.By investing in them richer
countries
make business and gain profit .
This
will be
also
helpful for poorer
countries
because job opportunities will rise,
employment
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rate would go up.Their
life -style
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will be changed
also
. Poorer
countries
often face natural calamities which
breaks
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down their economic,social and
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development
developement
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development
system .If richer
countries
help during
this
tough time by providing food ,medicine ,
clothes
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the whole situation becomes quite
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