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In the past, buildings often reflected the culture of a society but today all modern buildings look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. What do you think is the reason for this, and is it a good thing or a bad thing?

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In most people’s view,
buildings
 are a kind of window to learn
different
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culture
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cultures
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. Currently, the styles of
buildings
 become more and more similar no matter in which countries and cities. The reason
of
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this
 phenomenon may be the same standard of beauty,
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the lake
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lake
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 of cultural architectural technologies and fast social
life
 race. These reasons may lead
architecture
 in every country to a slow or even worse development. The reason why
buildings
 are becoming more similar may be the same standard of beauty,
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lake
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lack
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 of cultural architectural technologies and fast social
life
 race.
Firstly
, because of
the
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international art communications, the standard of beauty throughout the world become almost the same, especially in
the
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architecture
. There are more and more architects
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who draw
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draw
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 similar building designs and
build
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 them up in order to have a more convenient
life
 rather than express
the
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 cultural knowledge.
Secondly
, in many countries, the special cultural technologies in
architecture
 have
endangered
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. It is difficult to find an experienced craftsman to teach people how to establish a traditional and cultural building.
In addition
, modern
life
 is very fast
that
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everyone is
busying
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on
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with
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 their work and
life
. And workers
also
 be busy and anxious in their architectural work. So, they can’t pay more attention
on
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 how to make the
architecture
 special.
Therefore
, it is certainly a bad trend. If
buildings
 are all same, it is difficult to teach children to learn their own architectural culture. And it
also
 can reduce the
culture
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 atmosphere
during
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 people’s
life
.
Secondly
,
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similar building in different cities may decrease the
tourists
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number of tourists
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 from other cities and countries. People may
prefer
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 visit nearby
place
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places
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instead
. It will reduce the income
for
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local
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 government.
In addition
, the same building may be harmful
for
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 people’s mental health. It is boring for people to look
the
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 same scenes
during
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 the whole day. They need
watch
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 different sites to change their emotion and express their pressure. In conclusion, a variety of reasons cause
this
 phenomenon and it is not good for everyone.
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