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You are going to have a family party in a private room in a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter, say: ● why you need to use this private room ● what you need them to provide for the party ● inquire about the price of the food you are ordering

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Dear Sir or Madam, I'm Anirban Banerjee and I have a room booked under my name in your Hotel from the 25th June to 27th June. I would like to inform you, that we plan to have a small surprise birthday
party
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 for my daughter on the 26th inside my room. It will be a private
party
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 with just the four of us, me, my wife, my son and my daughter. I would be highly obliged if you can provide us with a couple of things to organize
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.
party
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. Since my daughter is 8 years old and she loves pink colour, would it be possible for you to decorate the windows and walls with pink ribbons
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Change the punctuation
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Consider using a question mark to signify that this sentence is a question.

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Moreover
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, she is a big fan of barbie and I have been
thinking
Wrong verb form
thought

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb thinking. Consider changing it.

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, it would delight her to have her cake in the shape of a barbie doll. Would it be possible for you to arrange
such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 a cake?
Finally
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, we would require some UNO cards and plastic cups for playing indoor games. We would love to have in-room dining and I wanted to proactively check with you, about the food and its prices, so that I could order it beforehand. We plan to have 'French fries' for starters, followed by 'Butter Chicken' and 'Garlic Naan' in the main course, some diet coke in beverages and
finally
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 end with ice cream. Kindly do send me your menu and pricelist highlighting our food choices. I would highly appreciate it if you can make these arrangements so that we could have a wonderful birthday
party
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 for my youngest kid. Yours Sincerely, Anirban

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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