Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Consumption of prepacked products is increasing in
this
modern world and they may take
place
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the place
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of homely
food
and cooking
would change
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. In
this
essay, I will agree with
this
statement.
Firstly
, I will explore the rising number of packed
food
and moving forward, I will discuss changes in cooking style.
To begin
with, we can observe that
the
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eating habits have changed drastically down the road as we are getting busier in our lives,
although
we don't have even 5 minutes to cook an egg for
the
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morning breakfast
this
has
replaced
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with
ready to eat
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meals.
For example
, working adults are found
of having
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a fancy diet rather than eating home-cooked dishes,
as
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a ,result it is giving birth to the new processed products
such
as bean cans, pickles etc.
Furthermore
, societies are tired of preparing healthy foods as both the men and women are working for a living they are not taking care of their health.
In addition
, people are moving towards a materialistic world
whereas
all are equally fascinated with exploring new cuisine.
For Instance
, buying an industrious
food
packet from a supermarket and eating it in just 10 minutes is a trend nowadays.
On the other hand
, In
this
contemporary society, communities are losing the skills of cooking at home because they are not in the practice of preparing the
food
at the house though parents are following the same tradition even their children follow them,
therefore
, It would vanish the ability In a human race. To
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, parents are changing their buying behaviour by not cooking fresh
dinner
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dinners
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at home
this
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leads to serious Illness and may cause cancer.
Moreover
, social media and technological developments are the main reason for
this
problem and people are unaware of the bad consequences that may affect their bodies. Exemplar, adults' wants are never ending and they seek new tastes
as well as
, a unique style of having bread. In summary, traditionally cooked foodstuff is
getting vanished
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from
the
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human culture and industries may come up with developed items for our consumption and make a profit by hurting our diet which is very unethical for human beings. In conclusion, I feel that people are the one who has to change their diet plans and stick with strict organic prepared day meals.
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