In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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Population

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elderly

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the elderly

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has grown higher

then

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ever before

nowdays

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. I always think that it is between the

government

and

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the famlly

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famlly

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family

has

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the responsibility to take

care

of the elderly, but

ofcause

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of course

mainly should count on the family itself. The

eldery

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elderly

had been working for their own

life

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goal

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of their

life

and to reproduce the next generation. They have

spend

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many effort on nourishing their young ones, but when their young

grew

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older they

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formfamily

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family

member

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will

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start have their own family but it is always their responsibility to take

care

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their parent.

Nevertheless

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the old

pepole

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people

have

spend

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many

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of their wealth on their children and it should but the part which their children so be

greatful

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grateful

for and should pay for

this

care

if they are not able to take

care

of the elderly themself.

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to company or

Government

. If they have good money they can look after themselves. We can do something to make easier their

life

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an organization or a voluntary association,

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or unions

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. Since they have been working for the company and

government

for ages. The

government

should provide

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benefit

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for them.

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or their former place could supply them with

life

insurance and a good Social Security Policy. For all of

them

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life

is hard and gets harder, in

the

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their old

ages

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age

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. They expect more attention and

good

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a good

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life

. So I think it is important for the Britain

government

and family to provide

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better

care

for the old people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

257 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

Aging population
Elderly care
Nursing homes
Social welfare
Intergenerational responsibility
Caregiving
Financial burden
Quality of life
Pension funds
Healthcare policy
Taxation
Subsidies
Private insurance
Long-term care
Sustainability

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