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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Change is the only constant, these beautiful words describe the true meaning of
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 there are some who constantly seek adventure and cannot settle
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, others find it very comfortable to spend their whole
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 in their hometown. In
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 a mentality and will state a few advantages and disadvantages of the same. In my view, there can be two major reasons
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 people opt to live closer to their birthplace.
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 is that they have a strong emotional
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 with the
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, which means they feel nostalgic, and they tend to go down
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memory lane once they think about their hometown. It is understandable as some of us feel stronger emotions than others do.
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, they claim to know each and every corner of their town. According to them, in case of an emergency, they very well know where to go and what to do, which can of course be helpful in certain conditions. Eventually, they feel it is best for them to either stay in their hometown or nearby.
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, since you know many people around the town, you can reap the benefits of having a number of contacts in different organisations.
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, it can have a positive effect on your career growth.
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, living in the same town as your
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 parents can definitely be good for them as you can pursue your dreams and take care of them at the same time.
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 living
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 your birthplace
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 many positives, each coin has a flip side. In terms of negatives, there are two major ones. In my opinion,
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 is too short to be spent
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. People should explore new places as only
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 holds for them. If they continue living a boring
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 and do not seek change
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 they can never know their true
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, the lesser they expose themselves to new cultures, the more they will lack in their lives. Apart from that, it can get really boring if
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 stays
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 all their
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. Actually, they probably would be missing
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great work or educational opportunities for doing so. In conclusion, it is
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 a personal choice
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whether to stay close to home throughout your
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 or to get out and experience new things.
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, I believe, the benefits of living
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 different locations are far too many to pass over. Especially, if you are young, you should make sure to travel the world and settle only after you have experienced enough.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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