Some people seek a lot of advice from family and friends when choosing their career. Others feel it is better to choose a career more independently. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
people
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base their
career
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decisions
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on the
advice
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sought from family and friends while others prefer to make these
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independently. In my opinion, it is best to find a
career
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with a small amount of
advice
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from family or friends compared to making
career
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decisions
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individually.
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, not only making their
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,
people
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tend to fall ahead of their
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career
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, but
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they potentially crave a niche for themselves
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workplace
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as entrepreneurs. With an independent person having enough self-stream, they have every confidence in their ability to assess what jobs
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coming up to all their standards.
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, they measure up to their expectations and any requirements with choosing a
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.
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, some
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argue that
career
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decisions
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should be made alone, while others maintain that these
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should be made in consultation with family and friends. Only when
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get a lot of
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from
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older
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having
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already gone the same way, do they seize the chance to choose a
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with
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light on their
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.
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, one of the most important turning points in
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career
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is making use of experienced
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to achieve far-reaching
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for
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prospects and
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the risk of the
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, it is others’
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in choosing a
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that could culminate in individual and spiritually developing experience. In Conclusion,
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people
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are entitled to choose a
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in dependently
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, I am of the view that taking others’
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makes a more significant contribution to
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a great
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. As far as I am concerned
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strategy is a major factor in making good
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and being successful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • life experience
  • emotional support
  • practical guidance
  • personal growth
  • self-discovery
  • self-reliance
  • personal satisfaction
  • ownership
  • values and expectations
  • preferences and passions
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