Some people seek a lot of advice from family and friends when choosing their career. Others feel it is better to choose a career more independently. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some
people
base their
career
decisions
on the
advice
sought from family and friends while others prefer to make these
decisions
independently. In my opinion, it is best to find a
career
with a small amount of
advice
from family or friends compared to making
career
decisions
individually.
Firstly
, not only making their
decisions
,
people
tend to fall ahead of their
career
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careers
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, but
also
they potentially crave a niche for themselves
at
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workplace
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as entrepreneurs. With an independent person having enough self-stream, they have every confidence in their ability to assess what jobs
is
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coming up to all their standards.
Moreover
, they measure up to their expectations and any requirements with choosing a
job
.
However
, some
people
argue that
career
decisions
should be made alone, while others maintain that these
decisions
should be made in consultation with family and friends. Only when
people
get a lot of
advice
from
the
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older
people
having
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already gone the same way, do they seize the chance to choose a
career
with
casting
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light on their
job
.
In addition
, one of the most important turning points in
everyone’
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career
is making use of experienced
people
to achieve far-reaching
implication
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for
job
prospects and
minimizing
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the risk of the
job
.
Finally
, it is others’
advice
in choosing a
job
that could culminate in individual and spiritually developing experience. In Conclusion,
although
people
are entitled to choose a
job
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in dependently
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, I am of the view that taking others’
advice
makes a more significant contribution to
choose
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a great
job
. As far as I am concerned
this
strategy is a major factor in making good
decisions
and being successful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • life experience
  • emotional support
  • practical guidance
  • personal growth
  • self-discovery
  • self-reliance
  • personal satisfaction
  • ownership
  • values and expectations
  • preferences and passions
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