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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

For many in authority, getting wealthier takes precedence over other matters,
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however
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 others have argued that there are other components of equal
value
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 in a
country
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.
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 that should be observed in communities Regarding wealth,
this
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 is a goal that fuels numerous changes within a society. By progressing economically, a
country
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 is able to improve its infrastructure . A good example of
this
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 would be road planning, in many prosperous countries there is
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 road network that's well maintained every few years by local councils.
In contrast
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, some developing countries have poor road networks,
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 is usually due to slow advancements made in the economy.
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Furthermore
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 a prospering
country
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 increases in
value
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.
This
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 is seen in the currency
value
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where
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its
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is
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able
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 to maintain its
value
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 with little fluctuations. From these points, improvements in the wealth of a
country
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impacts
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 it
postively
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positively
.
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, there are many other
factors
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 to take into account. Apart from the economy,
factors
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such
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 as
education
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 are of equal, if not more
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.
Education
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 is the foundation
on
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 which many lofty
ides
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ideas
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 and future plans stem from. Good
eduaction
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education
 informs the direction of progress. A highly educated
country
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 will make better decisions
afecting
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affecting
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country
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's progress in a number of
othe
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other
 fields.
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 South Korea's highly educated population are at the forefront of many technological advancements. By placing importance on
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, numerous companies
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 as Samsung and LG became powerhouses as
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 employees were innovative.
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 riches may propel a
country
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 forward it is misguided without input from
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such
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education
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. To conclude, a
country
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 fairs better if its goal is not just to enrich itself with wealth, but to place
value
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 on other contributing
factors
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such
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education
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 to advance its economy.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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