Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are unavoidable times when we have to face major issues, affecting directly not only our but
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people’s lives surrounding us. That when the right decision will be made to ensure your hopeful future,
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“the right decision”, will it be the
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up-choice or not? Regarding
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the field of working environment, the existence of conflicts and unpleasant circumstances is definitely inevitable.
However
, it depends on each person’s choice as well as the situation they are in.
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, working without passion and none of
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increments in years at
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young age might lead you to
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state of boredom, and it is advisable to fiercely fight for your brighter future.
In contrast
, that way will not be suitable for the one being a breadwinner, the one who carried the living pressure of their family, had
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to ensure the daily fundamental needs every day.
On the other hand
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who have trouble
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learning and concentrating in class. Obviously, there are numerous of
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that encourage them to fully accomplish their education road. Even though their abilities could not absorb these types to gain knowledge as well as their unaffordable family’s economy. In short, I have to strongly emphasize that each situation we are having difficulty in
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own way to tackle which is
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on our backgrounds. And it is unacceptable that apply one way of solving
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to any
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of
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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