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some people work for the same organisation all their working life. others think that it is better to work for different organisatiobs. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Most
people
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 have different perspectives deciding on their way, especially working. From
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 statement, it can be predicted that
people
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 will personally have a plan to do in their
company
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, and moving to another
company
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 will be better
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 a new plan and purpose in the future. I feel both of them have a special value and chance in different situations.
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, I will explant it in
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 essay.
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 of all, staying and working with us for a long time in the same organization will support us to increase our salaries and personal branding in the employer’s view. And
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,
people
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 can be easy to adapt other employees and the surrounding business. Following
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 situation, they can increase performance to reach their best project in the
company
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. Rising salaries and beliefs from other employees and bosses are an example of when we rely on adaptation and experience for a long time in the same
company
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.
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, they will move to a high position and their salary will be higher than their previous income.
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, moving to different companies is a good choice to start a new journey and network. With a new partner and team,
people
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 can have a big opportunity to make a good
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 impression on them. It is one step closer to getting a comfortable place and interesting conversation among them. If I have to choose
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 condition, I prefer to stay with my previous organization because I will need more effort to adjust to a new environment and team.
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, moving to another organization, we cannot predict
people
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 who will support and be kind to us.
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, continuing my career in one
company
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 is the best way to reach my purpose. By way of conclusion, I believe that the above has a good chance for their career in the future. Staying in one
company
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 will provide good concertation with the job while moving different companies can add some channels and have a new experience.
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