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When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria?

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The given line graph compares the changes in three different crimes namely
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, car theft and robbery that took place in New Port city centre between the period 2003 and 2012. Overall, it is clear that in New Port city centre,the robberies had the lowest figure compared to
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, which touched the peaked throughout the whole chart. In 2003,
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 accounted for just under 3500, as well as, car theft had a figure of almost 2700 and Robberies joined
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 changing race at just above 500. Following the period, By 2003, there was a dramatic upward trend in
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 of nearly 3800 but
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,
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 number sharply decreased to about 1300 in 2008, but after some swing,it stopped at just under 1500. Car theft, which remained almost the same in 2000 but after that continually rose to exactly 2750. In the end, Robberies figures, which did some fluctuation between the number of 500 to 1000 but at the end of 2012, it stopped at almost 750.
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