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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that individuals prefer to be self-employed
instead
 of working for a corporation or organisation recently. There are several reasons why
this
 happened and the drawbacks are
also
 introduced.
To begin
 with, people are more ambitious than ever before. Encouraged by so many successful examples, they want to be the
next
 Bill Gates.
Thus
, once they accumulate enough
experiences
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 and resources from a large company, they may choose to start their own business. Not only do they want to earn more money, but
also
 they can have more freedom
for
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decision
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. There will be no restrictions since you are the boss of yourself.
In addition
, the relationships between colleagues are hard to cope with nowadays. Citizens have a hard
time solving
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 problems
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 colleagues. Becoming self-employed means they have no colleagues or they can choose to hire an appropriate employee.
Nevertheless
, there are plenty of drawbacks
being
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 self-employed.
First
 of all, it can bring much more pressure compared to working in a company. You need to worry about the income.
In addition
, you will be busier than ever before.
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 what I know, if you want to succeed in your work, you may put more
efforts
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 and time
to
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 it. It is quite common for a self-employed person to work
in
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 weekends.
Moreover
, you may find it is difficult to earn money in the beginning. Generally, people spend their savings on renting rooms or buying equipment
instead
 of making a profit. In conclusion,
although
 there are many drawbacks
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 being self-employed, citizens are still willing to do so in order to pursue their dreams.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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