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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There exists a difference of opinion always on whether hosting international
sports
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event
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events
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 is bad or good.
Sports
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unites
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 people regardless of their race, religion, community etc and hold them together. I completely agree with the fact that hosting
global
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a global
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sports
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 carnival is beneficial.
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, global
events
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generates
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 great income for
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nation
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a nation
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 which organises it.
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such
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sports
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 happenings draw
huge
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crowd
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crowds
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 of supporters across the globe and even mammoth foreign investments.
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economy
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the economy
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 of South Africa boomed after organising the FIFA football world cup,
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 firms visited and made hefty investments,
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 it produced billion dollar profit for the
nation
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 of South Africa. People are ready to spend their money and travel to support their favourite team which is the driving factor that encourages nations to take up
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 tasks.
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 conducting
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sports
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events
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are
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 always a profitable venture for the hosting
nation
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.
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, taking up
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events
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 would directly contribute to
development
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the development
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 of
hosting
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the hosting
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city
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. The government of the particular country refurbishes the hosting
city
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 by renovating roads, cleaning the
city
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, improving the stadiums,
constructing
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and constructing
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 new buildings to
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accommodate
accomodate
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accommodate
 athletes and fans.
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, when
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the commonwealth
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 games were organised in India,
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city
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the city
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 of Delhi was beautified and every public property around the
city
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were
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 renovated.
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events
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 like
this
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 can improve the state of a
city
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 and make a better life for people residing over there.
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, the particular
city
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 gains global attention which can
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 lead to many other developments and
events
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 in near future. To conclude, I strongly believe that conducting international
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events
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 will have a positive impact and contributes to the betterment of the
nation
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 and its residents.
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