In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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At night, is against the law for teenagers to go outside without an adult in some places in the
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can be a preventive measure to protect the younger generation from
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is not an ideal solution. Teenagers are more vulnerable to
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the victims or the accused of unfortunate events
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at night. They are easy targets for
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or they do notorious things harming public property like spraying on walls for fun. A parent or a
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can prevent them from doing
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curfew can be a logical preventive measure.
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, a teenager can be in the streets for many reasons after dark. For
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example, they can be coming home after a long study session at a friend’s place. While some of them are fortunate enough to have their parents
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pick them up, some aren’t, their parents may have passed away. Sometimes there can be students who do part-time jobs to provide for family and coming home at curfew hours is inevitable. While
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curfew tries to protect teenagers from unnecessary trouble, in a way it
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violates their human rights. It is unfair to impose
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hefty laws against them. Some
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teenagers
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teenagers
are helpless in a way. I emphasise the government should find ways to protect the younger generation while upholding their freedom and not by cutting down.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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