Your friends recently moved to a new city. You will also be moving to the same city. Write a letter to your friends and include: - Ask where to find a place to live - Tell them what type of place you’re looking for - Share some fun things you would like to do when you get there

#friends #city #place #type #you’re #fun

Hi friends! As you all know by now, I’ll soon be moving to Los Angeles with the rest of you. The problem is, I’m not sure yet where I should live or what to do after I get there. I would like to find a place

that is

relatively inexpensive, but

also

in a safe area. It would be great if it is just a one bedroom

that is

also

close to a laundry facility. I don’t mind if it is a bit far from the university, but I would prefer it to be within walking distance to good restaurants and the beach, if possible. Can anyone help? Have any of you learned how to surf yet? I’ve been watching tutorial videos and I think it would be really fun to try and learn. Please let me know if any of you can help me with my request, thank you. Sincerely, Beth

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

152 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Your friends recently moved to a new city. You will also be moving to the same city. Write a letter to your friends and include: - Ask where to find a place to live - Tell them what type of place you’re looking for - Share some fun things you would like to do when you get there

The Greeting

Teenagers should not be allowed to use mobile phones in schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Once children start school,teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can done about this?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?