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Smoking not only harms the smoker but also those who are nearby. Therefore , smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In today's world smoking is a major problem for health. The individual who smokes harms them as well as the nearby crowd. Authorities must have to ban smoking in public places. I totally agree with the given statement and mention my opinion in my following paragraph and appropriate conclusion in end. Nowadays smoking is very harmful to the body but some crowd cannot understand that smoking is injurious to their health to them as well as to the nearby public
also
. Due to, smoking the lungs get affected and it is a waste of money
also
. Due to, smoking some people are elergergetic so their bodies may get affected. To elaborate in Dubai their government has strictly prohibited smoking in their country and now their people are so healthy and fit and no diseases are available regarding smoking.
However
, authorities must have to take action against
the
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smokers that they are prohibited to
smoke
 in a public
place
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 because in the public
place
 there are mass people gather and children are
also
 there so they can get affected. If someone
want
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 to
smoke
then
 he or she can go to another
place
 where
public
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the public
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 can get disturbed. For ,example Indian authorities
has
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 decided that no one can
smoke
 in
the
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 public
place
 if someone is caught smoking in a public
place
 they have to charge a fine and can
also
 be in strict warning so they do not
smoke
 in public places. To conclude, the government must have to ban smoking in public places because it is injurious to the health of someone who smokes as well as to the nearby public.
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