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You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser expressing your interest in the role requesting more information about it explaining what experience you have Write at least 150 words

#month #programme #uk #head #course #participants #events’ #organiser #interest #role #information
Dear
Mr.
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Jone, I am writing
this
 letter to let you know,
l
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that l
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have
one month
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one-month
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 training program in
UK
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the UK
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 and my ID number is 335435 . I have knew that
,
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apply
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 you want of
practicipants
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participants
 to be
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an organiser
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organiser
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organisers
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to
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 the social event that will be in
this
 month.l am interesting to play
this
 role . As you know, each event has scheduled
to
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start and finish time and many programs to be more
avictive
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active
. I would like to know all information about it.
Otherwise
,I have been paying
this
 role in all
event
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 in my university and have good experience to select me. I look forward to hearing your response. With my faithfully, Taha Abdul
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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