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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss views and give your own opinion.

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In our contemporary world ,
professionals
 play a key role in the way
people
 lead their lives .Whether
professionals
 should be worked in the
country
 where they did their training has been a very controversial issue recently .With regard to
this
 two opposing views have been suggested. Are they
work
 in the
country
 where they did their training or
work
 in another
country
 ? From my perspective , I believe they should be free to
work
another
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in another
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country
.
To begin
 with, Some
people
 who
is think
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professionals
work
 in the
country
 where they did their training think like that because they
thinking
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 very selfish they want to say
them
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we educated you and you have to stay in our
country
 you can not share your knowledge which is we teach you with anyone. I am not on the same page as these
people
.
To
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In
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 my way of thinking they should
work
 in
another countries
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another country
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 because they might be share what they learn
to
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with
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another
Correct quantifier usage
other
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people
. If they do that they who
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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professionals
 can develop themselves. For some other
people
 ,
however
,
They
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apply
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who
is believe
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believe
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professionals
 should be free to
work
 in another
country
 think certainly right. The rationale behind their thought might be they want to develop every
professionals
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professional
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 in every
country
 to the same level I support
this
 point of view and believe that if they should be free to
work
 in another
country
 they can improve themselves very quickly All in all , what can be concluded from the afore-mentioned remarks is that
although
 some individuals advocate
professionals
 should
be
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work
 in the
country
 where they did
training
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the training
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 . I strongly believe that they should
be
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work
 in another
country
 for experience and improve themselves
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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