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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
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In our contemporary world ,
professionals
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 play a key role in the way
people
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 lead their lives .Whether
professionals
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 should be worked in the
country
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 where they did their training has been a very controversial issue recently .With regard to
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 two opposing views have been suggested. Are they
work
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 in the
country
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 where they did their training or
work
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 in another
country
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 ? From my perspective , I believe they should be free to
work
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another
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country
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.
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 with, Some
people
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is think
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professionals
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work
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 in the
country
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 where they did their training think like that because they
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 very selfish they want to say
them
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we educated you and you have to stay in our
country
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 you can not share your knowledge which is we teach you with anyone. I am not on the same page as these
people
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.
To
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 my way of thinking they should
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 in
another countries
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another country
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 because they might be share what they learn
to
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with
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another
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other
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people
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. If they do that they who
is
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professionals
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 can develop themselves. For some other
people
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 ,
however
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,
They
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who
is believe
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believe
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professionals
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 should be free to
work
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 in another
country
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 think certainly right. The rationale behind their thought might be they want to develop every
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professionals
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professional
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 in every
country
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 to the same level I support
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 point of view and believe that if they should be free to
work
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 in another
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 they can improve themselves very quickly All in all , what can be concluded from the afore-mentioned remarks is that
although
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 some individuals advocate
professionals
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 should
be
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work
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 in the
country
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 where they did
training
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 . I strongly believe that they should
be
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work
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 in another
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 for experience and improve themselves
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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