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Nowadays, most large companies operate multi-nationally. To what extent those companies should have responsibility towards local communities in which they operate?

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In the process of globalization, an array of organizations run on an international scale should take on more responsibilities for the regional public. I firmly believe that The
first
 concern which should be taken by multinational
companies
 is to uphold the local environment. What’s more, with multinational
companies
 having devastating effects on the region’s air and water quality by running factories, decontaminating the chemical waste before dumping it into the sewage, or purifying the gas before releasing it into the air should pave the way for redressing the ecological balance in these areas.
Likewise
, paying
tax
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 should adopt a measure for multinational
companies
. Only after paying
tax
 can indirectly deprived local communities improve which are well deserved to reap y. If
this
tax
 money is spent on the upgrade public constructions and regulating
the
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socio-economic activities, facilitating people’s life will enhance.
Last
 but not least,multinational
companies
 should create job opportunities for indigenous people. Not only can the rate of employment decrease, but
also
 the quality of life of local workers
by
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making a living can improve in
this
 area.
As a result
, both the economic development and local communities will boost. In conclusion, it stands to reason that environmental safety and paying
tax
 as well as generating local vacancies for citizens should take precautions against the local public. I am of the opinion that these actions should consider these quick fix schemes for dealing with
this
 issue.
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