‘The best way to educate children is by using the internet in every lesson.’ To what extent do you share this opinion? What other ways are there of making lessons effective for children?

Some
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in using
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in all aspects of
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education
as a necessity. Anyway, others do not respect
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idea because they consider its defects and prefer to replace it with other options or at least use a
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combination. We discuss both views and pay to some solutions. Regardless
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importance of the
internet
for educational purposes especially in
childhood
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period
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nobody ignores
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, there are some considerable faults which should be noticed.
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, one of these problems is,
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the
internet
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of creativity among children and makes them completely dependent
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media. Generally, it would decrease thinking ability and gradually their creativity will be lost. If a child stays to find the response of a question just via
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, he will not find
his self
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potencial
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potential
resolving in front problems.
Finally
, According to
this
almost new technology, some areas and some kids do not have
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good access to the
internet
although
its cost is unaffordable for a group too. All these defects make
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as
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the only source of learning with limited efficiency. Coming back to
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and
face to face
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method
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of learning as what is being done in traditional schools is one of the ways could resolve educational problems. Making children
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think
firstly
about everything should learn and
then
teaching and giving them the answer is another solution to make
education
more effective, it means practical learning should be encouraged.
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kids and students
reading
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books, newspapers and magazines more than past and parallelly advise teachers
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these goods in their teaching programs more and more may increase the ability of
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leaning
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in kids, and, the
last
solution that I keep in my mind is obliging kindergartens and schools not to use more than normal
internet
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form of
education
. In conclusion, only
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learning and it should be combined with other forms of learning like reference books, magazines, newspapers and some other else as it not only somehow
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innovations in children but
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it is not available everywhere and for a
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the cost is not affordable.
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  • abundant source,
  • multimedia resources
  • reliance
  • misleading information
  • tactile learning
  • hands-on activities
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • interactive group activities
  • physical activity
  • outdoor learning experiences
  • child development
  • educational technology
  • interactive whiteboards
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  • virtual reality
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