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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the internet rather than teachers in classrooms. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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 communicate with peers--- The Internet development makes it possible that
students
 can take online courses, particularly after the outbreak of Covid-19. A large number of mentees and mentors are attracted by the merits of
this
 new technology
although
 there are some demerits. There are several advantages of E-learning. It can save lots of time and money. Anywhere available on the Internet, educators can give lectures to their pupils on their cellphones, laptop or pad. There is no doubt that
this
 will reduce commuting time to classrooms and even expenditure on accommodation fees.
In addition
, online
classes
 can promote equality of education resources. Due to the excellent physical and spiritual environment, large cities attract an increasing number of mentors from distinguished universities and the education gap between poor and rich areas has been extended day by day. E-lectures enable
students
 from rural areas to gain
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On the other hand
, distance courses are always taken by
students
 themselves. Compared to traditional face-to-face
classes
, those who take online
classes
 are easier to be distracted as there is no monitoring from teachers and peers and they may open other social media,
such
 as Tiktok, Youtube or Facebook.
Moreover
, it is difficult for them to carry out team projects or converse with their classmates and they just take
classes
 and complete homework entirely alone. Compared to the cons of online education:bringing convenience to mentees and mentors and promoting equality in our society, drawbacks pale insignificance as long as pupils can be motivated or focused and build friendships after class.
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