During the last century, the use of cars has increased dramatically. This has caused problems such as pollution and overcrowded roads. Why do people buy cars and what can we do to stop people from buying them?

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Undoubtedly, pollution and traffic congestion
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commonplace, nowadays, due to the rising numbers in
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100 years. While there are certain reasons
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why people continue to purchase cars, there are possible solutions on how to halt citizens from buying them. Arguably, a greater number of individuals buy
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convenience and flexibility.
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is mainly due to the fact that the public transportation system is not comfortable and reliable. To illustrate
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, one prefers to ride his own vehicle and travel to his destination without worrying about seating arrangement and contact with other passengers.
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can stop whenever and wherever
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they want to
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. So, the proprietorship of private cars is greatly beneficial for owners to feel more relaxed and comfortable going to places. Another reason
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why people purchase
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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