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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It has become quite prevalent nowadays that
people
 prefer choosing to be self-employed compared with working for
a
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 enterprise or organisation.
Discussion
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 now centres on whether there could be any disadvantages of being self-employed. There might be 2 reasons for the trend.
Firstly
, with the development of the society, life has become better and
people
 especially
younger
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 generation which we called Z-generation
persue
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pursue
 more of value
fullfilments
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fulfilment
fulfilments
fulfillments
 than
stable
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a stable
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job
 for
living
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a living
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. As
Masro
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Macro
Mauro
 has mentioned in his demanding model, after satisfying the basic living needs including food and
sense
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 of safety,
people
 will go for their spiritual needs. I have a friend named Cica, she gave up the
job
 in the top
company
 and chose to be a tidy consultant because she felt tired of the monotonous work without any
sense
 of
achievents
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achievements
achievement
 even though the salary is considerable.
However
, after she became self-employed as a consultant, she
has
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found her mission
for
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 life- each
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time
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tine
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after
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she
has
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finished a consultant case, she has a strong
sense
 of satisfaction. Another reason is that
people
 would like to have
a
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better control of their time
instead
 of a routine timeline for each. Especially for those young mothers who have babies but with no other
people
 like their parents to help them take care
the
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 babies. If working in a
company
, one has to follow the
company
schedule
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 to go to work in the
moring
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morning
 and get off work in the evening. You cannot control your time at least during the day.
Thus
 life-work cannot
effectively
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balance
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. Another friend of mine, Jenny,
she
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has a baby who is in a bad health condition and has to go to hospital frequently. So she has to quit
the
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job
 and became a self-employed
vblogger
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blogger
,
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 so that she could take care of her baby.
Eventhouogh
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Even though
 advantages like flexibility，better work-life balance etc. are obvious for self-employed, there are still disadvantages that are hidden behind it.
Firstly
,
people
 who are self-employed
has
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 to take the risks of the projects and deal with the relationship with their clients all by themselves, which means that the responsibilities become larger.
Secondly
, it is not like a stable
job
 that can provide
salary
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 constantly every month, the income is not very stable for self-employed
people
. Sometimes in
good
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season
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 the income might be high,
instead
 in a bad season
for example
, during the quarantine period because of the pandemic, most
people
 who are self-employed have no income. Overall. There are more and more
people
 choosing to be self-employed
instead
 of working in a
company
 for the reasons like more free time, achieving a
sense
 of value regardless of the disadvantages behind it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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