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A knowledge of maths is not important for most jobs nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#maths #jobs
There is no
knowledge
that is
 a waste of time ,
knowledge
 they say is 'power'. learning
mathematics
 is never less important, and I don't agree with
this
 statement. Learning
mathematics
 is practically what everyone uses to solve one problem or the other in their daily lives.
Mathematics
 from
onset
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 is
past
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part
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 of school curriculum starting from Nursery section to the upper class.
For example
, a petty trader who
do
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 not have
knowledge
 of
calculation
 knows nothing about profit and loss . Virtually, every part of our life has to do with
calculation
 in other to plan for the future. People save for the future
for
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individual who earns daily or monthly
calculates
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on
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how to spend wisely in other to save more for tomorrow's
unforseen
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unforeseen
 circumstances which may arise.
Also
, without the
knowledge
 of
calculation
 one cannot invest.
On the other hand
 , almost every profession needs
calculation
 whether a Doctor , Nurse, Engineer , computer operator , mini job employer,
a
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business person. I see no career that needs no
knowledge
in
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 calculations .
For example
, a doctor cannot give a patient medicine without having
a
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knowledge
 of the dose to be given.
Furthermore
, advancement in technology in
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society cannot be handled if one lacks
the
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knowledge
 in
calculation
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the calculation
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 . Things have changed from the use of manual tools to automatic equipment . Lack of
calculation
 will lead to
increase
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an increase
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 in unemployment and economic growth will depreciate. As far as advancement is
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a concern
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concern
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,
calculation
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the calculation
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 is
of
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apply
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important
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 in every aspect of life. Even a baker or a food vendor needs to know the
quantity
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 of ingredients to
be use
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 to produce a quality cake or
meals
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 for public consumption. A builder cannot mix
a cement
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cement
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 without calculating
on
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apply
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the amount and quantity of products to be used. In
conclusion
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,conclusion
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 everything is going digital and that's the more reason everyone should have
knowledge
 of
mathematics
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • omnipresence
  • automation
  • advanced mathematics
  • critical thinking
  • digitalization
  • software tools
  • mathematical literacy
  • personal finance management
  • logical reasoning
  • data analysis
  • mathematical competence
  • complex calculations
  • in-depth
  • broader job market
  • specific fields
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