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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
There is no doubt that
professionals
plays
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 a crucial way in the
people
 lead their lives. while some believe that
professionals
 should be necessary to
work
 in the place where they did their education. I would agree with those who argued that they should be exempt to
work
 in different countries if they want. In
this
 essay , I will discuss both sides of the argument. On the one hand, a certain degree of society
suggest
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 from
professionals
to
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stay in
country
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the country
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 where they did their tuition because
people
 who
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is think
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 like that want to develop their countries with their knowledge and make
a
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solutions
for
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country
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 problems .
Furthermore
, their
country
 will be
a
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very popular
at
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 that field.
For instance
, Turkish doctors is
a
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very popular in our world because they showcased their talents in
country
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the country
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in which
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which
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where
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 they did
training
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. In
this
 light of information if the others will
be do
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 like that
country
 will be very popular at that place.
On the other hand
, other
people
 want to go
different
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 countries because in their field their
country
 had
a bad conditions
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bad conditions
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. Due to that, salaries and
experiences
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experience
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is
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are
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 very significant for them and if they not took what they want they want to
work
another
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in another
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country
. To illustrate, Germany is very popular
about
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in
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 engineering and some engineers want to go there because of that popularity. I am on the same page with these
people
 and if they do that they become more knowledgeable and have
a better life conditions
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. All in all, what can be concluded
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form
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afore-mentioned
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 remarks is that
although
 some individuals advocate, I strongly believe that
professionals
 should be free to
work
 in another
country
 if they want.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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