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You share a parking area with several neighbours and have recently started having problems. Write a letter to be copied to all neighbours that share the parking area explaining the problems suggesting ways to help the situation proposing a possible meeting Write at least 150 words

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Dear
neighbours
, I have written that letter to
decusse
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discuss
 the problem's about the parking area. Recently,
There
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 are some
of
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neighbours
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the neighbours
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 have more than a car and
also
have
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 truck that why we have not enough space in our garage. In the
first
 place,I would like to explain
for
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 all my
neighbours
 that, each apartment has one parking for one car.
Secondly
, some
neighbours
 have put old things .
In addition
, some
children'
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 bicycles .For that, I ask them to take out it
from
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garage
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the garage
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.
Thirdly
, some
neighbours
 do not stop in
right
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 line and
some time
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 take place for two cars .
Finally
, I hope
from
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all my
neighbours
 to accept my invitation
in
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on
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 WhatsApp to arrange with each other
the
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 good time for all to
meeting
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 in my home to discuss
about
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all
problem
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 that we have met until now. With best wishes, Taha Tawfik
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