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Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sport celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is impressive. The government really want to improve their
tourism
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 to the top-notch. I like the way they link it to Louis Vuitton. Well, I have not. Of course, I love to visit it. Many friends and my relative describe it as a bustle, energic, and weird destination. It is a trip to BD province. It cost me only 2 million for a 2-day and 2-night trip involving accommodation, tickets for popular destinations, seafood, and beverages. Of course not. My country is famous for a
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 of beautiful see-sighting, delicious, sea goods, and other meals at appropriate prices.
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, you can buy a load of meat bread for just $0.75. I think that most visitors come from Asian areas. I met many Cambodia, Philippines, Taiwanese, Chinese, and Thais. I think Newyork city is the most expressive destination. I think it is the most modern and bustling city in the world, and its living price is
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 the highest. I often visit Vung Tan beach. It is not far from Sai Gon, so I can ride a motorbike there. The
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 service in Vung Tau is
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 very wonderful with affordable prices. And seafood is delicious,
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 as crabs, fish, and octopuses. Ah, no. During the pandemic, I had to stay at home because of my safe, and my family. In recent months, most people are vaccinated, and they go back to work again. There are a
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 of things to do. I have not read any papers about
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 expectation, but I think everyone hopes that.
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 contributes a
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 of money to the development of my country. Well, I think it is from a
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 agency. A slogan aims to sell more tours. I think there are a
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 of good things that make me happy or maybe richer,
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 as books, insurance, shares, and gifts.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical role
  • healthcare professionals
  • societal well-being
  • disparity in income
  • skewed values
  • essential services
  • remuneration
  • mitigate
  • global shortages
  • inherent value
  • nurturing
  • compensation
  • societal contributions
  • profound impact
  • equitable distribution
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