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Some people believe that schools should teach foreign languages for primary school children. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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It is argued among professionalists that children should begin learning
second
 or
third
 languages
since
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 elementary
school
 than in middle
school
.
This
 essay will demonstrate how studying
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 at a very young age can help students acquire information more efficient but will
also
 show that there are difficulties in finding a teacher for
young
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a young
the young
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student
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students
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.
Although
this
 issue is a significant one, the essay argues that the advantages do outweigh the disadvantages. Kids are believed to have the ability to learn faster and easier. They have good memories
which
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 can remember and recall things that are taught in class effortlessly. They
also
 have better
pronounciation
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pronunciation
 and intonation when speaking since their tongue is not fully grown yet.
Moreover
, if we hurry
taught
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 other languages
for
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student
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students
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, they would have a chance to develop other skills,
for example
,
critical-thinking
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critical thinking
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, problem-solving, and so on, and they will get to learn about other cultures and histories since one's
country
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country's
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language
 can reflect in many aspects.
On the other hand
, there are not many
language
 teachers for youngsters in academic fields. Mostly, professors are trained just only to teach in
university
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a university
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 or in high
school
. If we want to change
school
 systems for little
one
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,
this
 might cause
a
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trouble for
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intuition
instruction
instuition
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institutions
 in finding instructors. Even if they do get some tutors to teach kids, those tutors might not be qualified enough and might end up giving wrong
informations
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information
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 to children. To conclude,
although
 it is difficult to find educators for students in elementary
school
 that have an expertise in
language
, teaching children since primary
school
 greatly helps kids improve many skills for them and
also
provide
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provides
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 more appreciation
about
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culture
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the culture
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 and history of other countries.
Hence
, the positive effects definitely outweigh the drawbacks.
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