Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Since obesity has risen among adults and children, many people

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raised their concern about the highly used

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sugar.

As a result

, some people claim that sugary

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should raise their

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in order to reduce consumption.

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I partly

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disagree

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view as I think education may be more effective.

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with, the intention of purchasing sweetness may reduce if making sugar

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expensive. Since

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sugar

is a fundamental material for many foods and drinks, firms may have to increase their prices in order to maintain profit.

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of each cake may increase

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£2 owing to the high cost of raw

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.

Therefore

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the consumer

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consumers

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may be less willing to spend their money on sweetness which may lower the chances of getting health problems.

On the other hand

, educating the public may solve the roots of the issue. As certain citizens may not understand the undesirable effects

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brought by injecting too much

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sugar

, providing

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access

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correct knowledge may encourage them to change their

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.

For example

, people may force themselves to consume less sugar once they know that heart attack is related to obesity.

Therefore

, by giving them the knowledge, the public may choose not to take high-

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sugar

products

even if they are rich. In conclusion,

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the price may reduce the intention of buying

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surgery

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products

, it may not be effective

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those who are wealthy.

However

, educating the citizens may be more beneficial since it can change

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habits.