Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sport celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?

in
this
contemporary era , many
people
do
work
as doctors , nurses and
teacher
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teachers
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and they earn
small
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amount
off
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money but
people
who
work
in
medical
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field
feild
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field
and education
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field
feild
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they prompt
higher
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amount than celebrities.
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,
i
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completely agree with
this
statement and
i
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will give
full
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explanation
about
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this
topic in upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, many individuals
work
in different
different
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fields
fieds
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fields
and they all earn
small
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amount of income as
compare
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to
actor
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actors
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and
sport
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person
.
This
is not beneficial for
people
work
for
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committee
committed
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and nations development
therefore
it would be
more
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controversial topic for society .
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, if the income would be high so they can
work
with full energy
also
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they
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do some
charity
work
for needy
people
.
For example
, if
doctor
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doctors
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and
teacher
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teachers
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who
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earn more income so they do some
charity
work
not only for
healthy
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the healthy
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and wealthy
person
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people
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but
also
for children who
not
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have money for education.
Moreover
, many doctors and
teacher
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work
for free and they do not have much for
equipments
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equipment
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and
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facilities
fecilities
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facilities
for
people
so if other rich
people
give some
fund
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or do some
charity
for
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help
people
then
also
it would beneficial for needy residents.
Such
as
shree
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work
for needy
people
as a
business man
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and he
also
do
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some
charity
for
uneducated
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an uneducated
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person
. In conclusion ,
this
is
dispansable
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dispensable
indispensable
for every
person
who did some
work
not only as
doctor
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a doctor
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and
teacher
but
also
do some
work
as
charity
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a charity
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it would be important for
child
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the child
a child
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and unhealthy
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical role
  • healthcare professionals
  • societal well-being
  • disparity in income
  • skewed values
  • essential services
  • remuneration
  • mitigate
  • global shortages
  • inherent value
  • nurturing
  • compensation
  • societal contributions
  • profound impact
  • equitable distribution
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