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the growth of onilne shopping will one day lead to close all shops in towns do you agree or disagree?

#growth #onilne #shops #towns
Advancement is growing in every aspect of life. purchase online is on the increase because it is easily accessible , less
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, and
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convenient
convientent
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convenient
.
for example
, individuals no longer go into a
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crowded
 market seeking
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items
 or stock needed for personal consumption. Again, the market setting
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in terms
 of displaying goods can make one get exhausted
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 online shopping where products are displayed in an amazing setting which is
more
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easier to pick out and
also
 with
range
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 of
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veracity
that is
 unlimited. again mode of
payment
 in an open shop is kind of frustrating, being
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 a long queue after selecting
items
 and again
items
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 to be
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 with the system before making
payment
.
Also
 ,shop outlets do not express services required to satisfy a customer unlike
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online where reviews about
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their
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 services are displayed.
also
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working class
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 individuals
fins
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 it difficult to purchase
items
 in
an open shops
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open shops
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 due to stress after work
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, most open shops are
on
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 the traffic area. for
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example
exmple
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douglas
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 market in
owerri
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 a lot of traffic
do
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 occur frequently people
finds
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 it challenging getting into the
markert
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market
 most of
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 due to roadside hawkers .another advantage of online shopping is the
deliver
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 service
that is
 rendered and as
such
payment
 could be made through mobile transfer or cash unlike open shops that deal on cash
payment
 .online shopping saves time and energy .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brick-and-mortar
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Retail apocalypse
  • Omnichannel retailing
  • Digital transformation
  • Innovative technologies
  • Sustainable shopping
  • Logistics and delivery
  • Virtual shopping experience
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